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Comes The Dawn
By Veronica A. Shoffstall

After a while you learn the subtle difference,
Between holding a hand and chaining a soul.

And you learn that love doesn’t mean leaning,
And company doesn’t mean security.

And you begin to learn that kisses aren’t contracts,
And presents aren’t promises.

And you begin to accept your defeats,
With your head up and your eyes open,
With the grace of a woman, not the grief of a child.

And you learn to build all your roads on today,
Because tomorrow’s ground is too uncertain for plans,
And futures have a way of falling down in mid-flight.

After a while you learn,
That even sunshine burns if you get too much.

So you plant your garden and decorate your own soul,
Instead of waiting for someone to bring you flowers.

And you learn that you really can endure…

That you really are strong,

And you really do have worth,

And you learn and learn…
With every goodbye you learn.



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Jan 12, 2022
Bill : Hello sunflower111.
Thanks for this timely post. I was just contemplating yet another rhyme for one of your other posts on the miscalculation of the u/i=? equation and this post has made me realise that in some cases u=i. I will now have to retire to edit my new thoughts on the subject.
Best wishes
Jan 12, 2022
Bill : Hello Sunflower.
Okay! I have re-configured my conception and my rhyme about some of the great things (especially poems) you have posted which are filled with titbits of wisdom for others.
My reaction is often that these words of wisdom are sometimes undermined by the use of 'you', when the writer is expressing their own views, which may or may not coincide with the views of the audience. Sometimes, this use of 'you' feels like 'telling' people what they ought to think or do. For me, this is a classic bullying technique which needs to be exposed. However, as this post so eloquently illuminates, this is not always the intention. Although, as the author is expressing their own view, the more appropriate word might be 'I' rather than 'you'. But, as a composite compromise, I felt that the word 'we' could express an invitation to a feeling of 'belonging' to a similar, shared mindset.
I know that these posts are not meant for deeper analysis, but I have difficulty holding myself back when there may be subliminal messages within the messages.
Apart from that. I must thank you again for providing me with motivation to think and produce another rhyme.
Best wishes

‘I' and ‘YOU' = ‘WE' ?

Within this rhyme I'll tell you why
I should explore the ‘you' and ‘I',
for recently, it seemed to me
these weren't a separate entity.

Sometimes the use of ‘you' is used
when ‘I' is meant, so it's confused
and leaves the reader wondering why
the writer did not use the ‘I'.

This often comes when people share
their feelings and beliefs, and where
they wish to show that what they know
has relevance to friend and foe.

But feelings are a personal thing,
which may mean much, or nothing,
when applied to someone who
may not feel they way you do.

When feelings and beliefs apply,
then surely we should use the ‘I'
to clearly indicate the source
and help to show the concept's course.

The use of this logic should be
when all the feelings come from me
then everyone who reads can see
where they came from originally.

When writers write on other's thought,
it may be felt that then they ought
to use the ‘you' instead of ‘I'
which helps its source identify.

The ‘you' and ‘I' can be exchanged,
which means the meaning's rearranged
and ‘you' becomes an ‘I', so it
would seem to have no benefit.


‘I' and ‘YOU' = ‘WE' ? (continued->)

I've thought about this thing a lot
because I feel that we have got
a complex concept on the go
where concealed concepts may not show.

Some give commands or say 'you-should',
as if, what ‘they' say, must be good,
but from a listener's point of view
it's bullying from them to you.

People who ‘tell' to ‘you' this way,
may think that what ‘they' have to say
is more important than your view,
implying that your views aren't true.

Then there are covert commands,
concealed instructions and demands
to think and do as other's say
and thus, not follow your own way.

I've rhymed on bullying before
to show it's something I abhor,
so when I see it written down,
predictably, it makes me frown.

Some communicants have shown
how they have neither grasped or known,
that what they've written down or said
is not what's heard and not what's read.

Whene're we use the ‘I' or ‘you'
the meaning should be clear and true,
so folk won't jump to a conclusion
and it doesn't cause confusion.

There's an alternative I've seen,
a little word that's always been
there to replace ‘you and ‘me'
and that diminutive word is ‘WE'.

B. Withers 2022
Jan 12, 2022
sunflower111 : ???? Just sharing poems I like or have touched me in some way.
Jan 12, 2022
sunflower111 : Gosh, I guess you can't use emojis in blogs...those are smiling faces!
Jan 12, 2022
Panko : Lovely words again sunflower, the first two lines reminded me of my sisters loveless relationship with her second hubby
Who knows the price of every thing but the value of nothing as she fell in love with his wealth at first but now it's strife!
The holding of hands or the chained soul summed it up for me, I might send her the rest of it as it might wake her up?
But I'm sure it's too late as she is used to the high life.
Jan 12, 2022
sunflower111 : It can be hard to know your self worth and get yourself out of a situation where you feel trapped.
{Insert Hugs emoji here}
Jan 20, 2022
iMacG5 : This has nothing to do with writing skills like you folks posess but just a couple thoughts on how we address our audiences. I was an electro/mechanical trouble shooter in the chemical industry and taught the National Electrical Code to Apprentice electrcians in a VoTech School at night. I avoided the word “I” except when the action being explained was specific to me and/or my method of handling it. When I discussed things my teams or students might experience or did experience I used the word “We”. If I said,”When you encounter that, you should do the following”. If I changed that to, “When 'we' encounter that, 'we' should do the following.”, it felt like our interests were more in common with each other's rather than the boss or teacher dictating to “them”.
Just my thoughts with respect,

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